english assignment

hey people - -... i need help~ i need you all to give comments for my poem.. i dun really know how to write one so bear with it (haha xD)

New beginning, another ending

In the past I was a lonely boy.
Sat by the window,
Knew nothing of joy
Unhappy, unloved, unwanted.

Then came spring.
Marks the new beginning
The wind of changes bring.
A girl walked into my life
And save me from myself.
Like a guiding star,
That heals my scar.
A light in the darkness,
That frees me from my sadness.
She said that she's meant to be,
That 'someone' who cares for me.
That girl that taught me 'love',
The person who makes me smile,
The only one that will never makes me cry.

2nd September, the starting of Fall.
Tapping sound on the window pane,
Dancing rhythm of the sorrow rain.
Sitting by the bed,
Where my angel laid like dead.
I wish she could defy fate,
And wake up from this slumber.
I know not what to do,
Nor who should to turn to.
Seconds ticked by,
Where it seems eternal like a lie.

Then it all went wrong:
When her smile goes fading,
And her heart stops beating.
I sit there where my hope ceases,
Like a mirror smash to pieces.
Reality; A blade that cut through my heart,
Leaving my world falling apart.

My tears are nothing in that cruel rain,
My cries are nothing as they go in vain.
My prayers are nothing when God doesn't care,
My life is nothing when you aren't there.
My love is nothing...
When you'll never know.


Composed by Rattanin~!